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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
Hey it's Whiskey from Holiday Review Swap!

I chose this story because it sounded fun and original, and it didn't disappoint ( that's also why I decided to read a second chapter :P)!

I like the idea of a sarcastic teacher sticking to his subject against all odds. Some of his comments are hillarious (I liked the part about him never leaving the walls of the classroom). Although I wish we knew more about his motivation and life, I think it would add more perspective.

You had the good idea to give all the students nick-names, which helps keep them apart although there are so many, and makes them seem more unique and eccentric. This way, you also focus on the group-dynamic of each class rather than on individuals or situations, which is different and more interesting.

Basically, this was fun and the only advice for improvement I can offer is that maybe you could add some back-story to the Professor. He is our narrator, after all, and we see everything through his eyes. It would help to know about who he is and how he really feels (he can't always be experiencing only irritation-discomfort, can he :P).

Also, some more conflict, plot development or theme-choice could help make each chapter seem more complete and consequential. Either have each chapter function like a short-story, or have them actually follow up on one another. So far, you seemed sort of unsure as to what you actually wanted to say...
Every real story is tells more than just itself, you know what I mean? Maybe you could turn this into a reflection on the way Muggles are peceived different after the war, or you can switch to making this a story about exploring the life and times of the professor. Or something else, of course. But there has to be a point...

Well, good luck, I hope I could be of some help ^^ Cheers!

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