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Review:Jchrissy says:
LILY JAMES AHH HEART MELT. I don't even care that it was just a mention, she still lectured serious and they were still there and AHH. My little heart is going to LJ feels explode.

I love that Mad Eye is realizing someones in there, his mind that is. It was a bit heart breaking that he was fighting so hard to get above the waves, doing everything he could to try and get the intruder out, but it was just too much. But ever scene he's getting more aware and stronger, and I'm very curious to see where he is by the almost end of it.

The watch detail! It was almost a bit chilling to imagine Moody forgetting something like that, and such a strong sign for the part of him that's in the present that it's not right, that something's off.

I still really love the amount of details you take care to add. Little things like Hogwarts being the fall back location just give this such a realistic feeling.

And the detail about Everyone hiding secrets and those being deadly to someone also struck me as absolutely perfect. It's so true. Lily and James and Sirius and Peter kept their switch of secret keeper a secret. Dumbledore kept so many secrets from Harry that could have killed him. Peter kept the fact that he wasn't strong enough to take it all a secret. Gah. It's so sad and you put these tiny lines in there that flow in so perfectly, but at the same time have so much emotional boom behind them.

The way we look at this through Moody's eyes still continues to really feel right to me. It's precise, he sees things in a factual way, he doesn't feel things unless he's allowing himself to, and he notices what needs to be noticed first keeping his mind on what actually matters.

And I love the progression in the time line as well as the details you've tied in, and now I'm wondering if the spy for the Order is who I think it might be. Ahhh.

I'm so impressed that you continue to make it clear what spells he's using, what he's doing for his protection, how he things about it... I can't imagine it would be easy to say in such an intense and specific style... but it's so worth it because the effect makes for such an original and intriguing read.

Awesome chapter, as always ♥

Author's Response: Haha- I'm glad that you enjoyed that mention. I don't think that I could have written a Marauder-era, Order-centric chapter without a mention of them. ;)

I'm glad that you like the progression that's been made with the battle fought inside Moody's mind.

The watch detail- for me, it's one of the most obvious factors that reveal the problems with Moody('s mind). It was almost painful to write it because the action was something so totally NOT HIM (since I can't use italics in a response).

I'm also very happy that you liked the level of description that I'm including. I don't know if I was specifically thinking about the secrets that the Marauders kept when I wrote that sentence (Moody's an absorbing character), but now that you've mentioned it, it fits perfectly.

I'm glad that you think that my writing style continues to suit Moody's personality. And the spy probably is who you're thinking it is. :P

Thank you so much for your lovely and absolutely fantastic comments! I love reading them and I really appreciate them. THANK YOU.

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