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Review:Secret Santa says:
Helloo there! This is your Secret Santa with the first of your reviews :D

So, this story has got me interested from the opening paragraph! It reads beautifully, like a fairytale, and with lots of mystery in it. You can be very descriptive and I really enjoyed the little details here and there e.g. her face was flushed from the heat of the bath and the strain of the corset. Very nice :) I love the idea of the twelve sisters and princesses - twelve feels like a very good number :D

The beginning of your story was very interesting and it certainly was surprising when it turned out to be a dream! There was quite a definite shift of mood from the excited anticipation in the dream of Dezzy's ball to the dreary reality of their lives. And that staircase winding into the forest! That was a wonderful image!

There are some spelling errors here and there but nothing too major.

OK, I think this is a great start! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter and finding out who the mysterious watcher is :D

Author's Response: Hello! I'm so excited that you've started reading my stories, and can't wait to find out who you are :)
I love that you were drawn in right from the opening! I think something special about fairytales is that they always make you want to hear the whole story, and get your attention right at the beginning, so I really wanted to do that with this story! And I think the details are also important, because with this story in particular, I have a really specific picture in my mind and want to get it down in writing as much as I can!
I hope you enjoy the rest of the story, and that it keeps you interested! Thank you so much for the review!
Cassie :)

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