I thought I'd stop by. This was on my list to read for a while, and I've finally gotten around to it. You can blame school, I know I do.
Eileen Prince. The fairest probably wouldn't be the first word I'd use to describe her, but she was certainly someone I pitied. My feelings haven't changed after reading you one-shot. You've painted her in a vastly different light in this story, rather unflattering in her actions. Unflattering and desperate which are all ironic considering your title.
I loved the set up. You started out with a bittersweet description of her final rest, then gave us different snapshots of her live. Reverse metamorphosis in a sense - from the butterfly to the caterpillar and finally, to nothing. It was beautiful.
There was so much emphasis placed on her beauty and talents. The art of potions making being her passion. In the end both of them destroyed her. I love the spin on her relationship with Tobias. He wasn't the monster then, she was. It somehow reminded me of Merope Gaunt and Tom Riddle, though the Amortentia was used for completely different reasons.
I loved this story, the flow was really well done for your first time using 'stream of consciousness'.
Author's Response: Lia! It's so sweet of you to come by and check this out! I'm sorry I took so long to respond.
I couldn't get this idea of Eileen as Snow White out of my head. I think that's where all the winter imagery came from; I kept picturing her as frozen, cold, pale as death. We know from canon that she wasn't exactly a pretty face, but I could see her as a regal figure fallen from grace due to her marriage. She's desperate to hold on to the trappings of her pureblood heritage, and yet she yearns to step out and be her own woman, too. Sadly, in this story she fails at both of these.
Metamorphosis was obviously a major theme here for me. She fades from the butterfly back to the caterpillar, locked in the cocoon of death, and in doing so she also transforms from the fair princess into the evil queen. Someone else mentioned seeing hints of Black Swan in there, too, which I'll admit to as well. It was a challenge to wrap all of that up into one character, and I'm glad you liked it.
I, like anyone, am quick to hate Tobias for hurting Eileen and being cruel to Severus. Thus, it was sort of interesting to try to turn the tables and make him a pitiable figure. It sounds awful, but I think they sort of deserved each other here--he didn't want her to have magic, and she didn't want him to pay attention to anything except her, and to be her perfect prince, despite knowing he could never be that. I definitely borrowed the Amortentia idea from Merope and Tom, and I'm glad you felt like it worked well here.
Thanks so much for your lovely review :)