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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! I'm here to return yet another of your wonderful reviews!

Wow- this was another very intense chapter. Once again, I think that you're doing a great job of moving the story along while also allowing small moments for character portrayal and development.

Hermione's urgency was very evident in this chapter and even though it was frustrating to read, Ginny's hesitancy was also very well done. It makes sense that she would be reluctant to leave her house in the middle of the night without any explanation- it was an obvious train of thought to think that Hermione has gone slightly crazy (and who would follow a crazy woman into the night?) It was unfortunate, though, that Hermione didn't actually explain the situation in detail. A good blurt of "Your husband's a man-eating zombie!" probably would have cleared away the confusion a bit or at least shocked Ginny enough to grab her and apparate away. Then, of course, Harry wouldn't have had his Queen...

The last line of this chapter was great! It was the perfect conclusion to this chapter and added a lot of suspense and anticipation for the next one (which has been, of course, fortunately posted already). Though it's happy, in a way, that Ginny has now been reunited with Harry, it's also very sad because now Hermione is completely alone (except for her children and extended family, of course... But essentially alone) and she will most likely be the one to kill Harry and Ginny.

It was interesting, though, how Harry was drawn to his house and to Ginny. I'm not that familiar with zombies- are they typically drawn to places of strong emotional attachment during their lives?

As well, I liked the connation of the last line. It signifies that Harry is not only a zombie but that he's a powerful zombie who has a high status in the zombie army he's creating. Will this turn into an all-out battle between the witches and wizards and zombies?

I did notice one tiny mistake as I was reading: in the phrase "your children's life in danger" it should be "children's lives". :)

All in all, I think that you did a great job with this chapter. It's a very enjoyable read and I'm looking forward to continuing on with it. Great work! :D

Author's Response: I am so dreadfully sorry it has taken me so long to respond to this review.

First of all, thank you so much for leaving it :)

You're right, Hermione wasn't very clear when she told Ginny what was going on. I think part of it was she still wanted to protect Ginny from the truth even though she knew that it was staring her right in the face.

I do have a plan for the reason that Harry is drawn to family members so stay tuned for that one. I don't think it's a normal zombie characteristic, no.

Thank you again so much for reviewing this I really super appreciate it!


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