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Review:Ravenclaw Secret Santa says:
At the end of the last chapter, I figured Severus knew something, just not what Beth feared. Then at the beginning of this chapter, when he was refusing to give more details, I figured out that it was a bluff, which it was indeed revealed to be just a few sentences later. Still, I have to give Severus some credit here, because Beth actually revealed something pretty important to him. Now he knows without a doubt that she and the Marauders definitely have a secret. Before, he was probably 99% sure (well, maybe 100% sure they had a secret, but maybe only 80% sure it's something pretty damaging), but how he is probably going to be more determined than ever.

Especially now that Lily and James are starting to be an item.

I know I've said this at least twice already, and maybe more than that, so please bear with me. :P I am quite enjoying the way you are portraying the Marauders (plus Beth). They just seem real . . . they are characters, not caricatures.

I also admire your ability to give them each a different characterization, all of which seems in line with the rather scanty canon details we know. That is something authors sometimes struggle with when writing about a larger group of characters. It becomes difficult to differentiate all of them, but you are doing quite well.

This chapter wasn't quite as intriguing/tense as the last, but it was quite enjoyable. It was nice to see the friends all doing schoolwork and interacting with one another--basically, going about their ordinary days. This chapter is a bit more preparatory than the last, I think. It's more a setting-up chapter than a zooming the plot along chapter (although the plot did, of course, move along at the speed limit).

I can see why so many people have been intrigued by this story! You write very well. :-)

Author's Response: Yes! You got exactly the point of the bluff, and arguably the reason Severus made it in the first place -- it's the same reason you might try and bluff someone into confessing something, really. They might reveal something to you they may not mean to. Sneaky Severus! He's definitely going to be more determined than he was before, if only because he's insatiably nosy and can't rest until he knows everything that's going on.

I'm still very, very pleased that you enjoy the way I write the Marauders. :) I've worked hard on their characterization over the course of these books, and they've come to feel almost like my own friends in the course of writing. It was very important for me to make them each their own person, while at the same time making them alike enough to make them a group. You know?

Not all these chapters are going to be chock full of tension and action, I'm afraid, since that's really not my forte, but it's great to hear you like the story in spite of that! And I'm flattered to hear that you think I write well. I'm having a sort of rough day of writing, and it's comments like that which keep me going, make me WANT to keep writing. ♥ Thank you so much!


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