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Review:Remus says:
Hey! Perelandra here with your review!

First off, thank you for reviewing my story! It made me happy to take up to see it! Second, so sorry it has taken a while to, you know...but I'm here!!

To be honest, I wasn't sure I wanted to read this. Don't get me wrong! I wasn't sure I wanted to read it because all Fred and George fics, where George mourns for Fred...they just kill me! They're always so sad and half the time they make me cry! So I wasn't sure if I wanted to cry! Hahaha!

Anyway, on with the review...I have my tissues ready, just in case! And just so you know, I read and review as I go along.

The first part, where George refuses to tell people what had happened...that was heartbreaking. You actually managed to bring that scene to my mind and, thanks to your narrative, it flipped to George's POV and saw everything in slow motion. And once again, I got mad at JKR for killing Fred. :(

George just wanting Fred to himself was just...idk...sad! I can't imagine what it is to lose your other half... so George's feelings and actions feel so realistic that I too wanted everyone else to leave George alone with Fred so he could mourn in peace.

The end! Him just refusing to let go of his best friend, of the pain he felt...I got teary eyed! Such a powerful chapter. Your choice of words was what made this first chapter very strong. The narrative was great and the lack (and I'm using that word very loosely) of detail made it more powerful. In a way, this chapter felt, to me, the same as George must have felt. He didn't care about anything else. Nothing mattered to him at this point.

You actually made me cry! Haha, this is why I didn't want to read it! However, I always give kudos to authors who make me cry since I believe it it takes very specific wording and detail to do so. So kudos to you on this.

Hopefully I can come back and read what's next!

Until next time

Author's Response: Hello Rosie! Thanks so much for your lovely review :D

Oh, I hope I didn't cause too many tears! Fred's death was one of the saddest most shocking moments in the series for me, and that's what I've been trying to convey in this chapter - shock and grief. And I'm glad you thought my word choice was effective in getting the feel of the story right :D Word choice / diction is something I can get quite obsessive about. As for the lack of detail, I do sometimes tend to be a bit more descriptive, but I'm trying my best to be true to my character's POV i.e. George. Also, I'm using first person POV, which can be quite limiting actually :D And there are definitely things that hold George's focus and other things which he might gloss over...and I'm trying to convey all this. Well, hopefully I'll succeed in the long run!

So thanks very much once again for your wonderful review! I'm sorry for all the tears :( But happy holidays anyway!


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