|Review:||Santa In A Dress says:|
Hi! It's me again! (I was going to continue reviewing yesterday, but it was getting late, so I'm continuing today.)
I wish that I had been able to see the look on Charlie's face when he was told about passports! That was a very fun and unique detail that you included; I don't remember ever reading a fanfiction that included passports. The only travelling that's done is through wizarding transport, so it was excellent to see the subject being put into a new context. :D
It was quite sad to read Charlie's thoughts at leaving his family, especially as you wrote his emotions so well. I quite liked the fact that you mentioned that being in a bar full of chattering people was a comfort to Charlie because it reminded him of being surrounded by his family. Aw. ♥ If Liz doesn't want Charlie, I'll gladly have him! ;)
The way that he approached the bartender feeling annoyed that the bartender was chatting to his friends only to discover that there was a meeting between the bar staff, which caused him to feel guilty, was lovely to include! You manage to successfully give us (the readers) a feeling of being there in the story by including all of the little details without info-dumping, which is really good!
Charlie and Liz's flirting... oh the feels I had when I read it! "I'm Liz- um, I mean Elizabeth," "I'm Charlie. Well, Charles, really, but..." "But your friends call you Charlie?" I ship them so much!! Especially the fact that Liz is the first person to make Charlie laugh in the six months after Fred's death... Aw. ♥
It was so fun that Charlie stayed at the bar all night in the hope of being able to talk to Liz, and then he didn't get the chance to. *glares at all the bar's customers for keeping Liz busy* And that last line just summed it up perfectly; how Charlie is falling for Liz but he doesn't realize it yet! I'm getting so many feels for this ship- you're a really talented author!
And now I have no more chapters to read and review, which makes me sad. While I hop off to peek your author page for other fanfics to review, here's a message for you: please, please update! XD
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad the 'passports' bit turned out so well! I was kind of worried about that because I didn't want to go into TOO much detail about how Charlie got to the U.S., because I thought that would take the focus off of the story itself, but I wanted to at least give an explanation as to why his family couldn't find him! I'm glad to see it worked!! :)
Although he left because he felt the need to be away from his family for a while, I can't imagine that doing so was very easy for Charlie, which is where the bar thing came in. It kind of made sense to me that Charlie would surround himself with people as a way of easing his loneliness (I mean, he IS in a whole other country), so I'm really glad you liked it!!
Whew! Thank goodness! I was SO afraid that I had info-dumped in this chapter (even though I hadn't used that exact expression XD). I'm So glad to hear that this didn't come across like that! And YAY for you feeling like you were really there!!
Teehee; that flirting moment is probably my favorite part of the whole story so far (at least what's posted). And if you think THAT's some cute flirting, just wait till you see Chapter 4! *winks* :P
Haha; I kind of hated those bar customers myself. How dare they keep Charlie and Liz from talking! But don't get too upset; what's meant to be will find a way! *Whistles* ♥ AWWW! Thank you!! *Hugs* I promise, I'll update soon!!
You have given me not one, not two, but 5 AMAZING, LOVELY reviews and I can't thank you enough, nor tell you how much it means to me!! THANK YOU!! And I Hope you have an AMAZING holiday; MERRY CHRISTMAS SANTA!!! :D *Hugs* ♥