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Review:MargaretLane says:
Keen O'Brien. That sounds like an Irish name, or at least the surname does and I guess the first name could be an Anglicisation of Cian.

You've written that "the others seemed to thing along the same lines". I'm guessing you mean "think".

Yikes, that was a hard riddle. I read it through a couple of times, but couldn't come up with anything. My original thought was a family, as a family contains your "roots", but then I thought that families DO grow and the part about taller than a tree didn't really fit either.

Really like your description of Ravenclaw.

"Professor" should have a capital "P" when it precedes a name, like "Professor Stebens".

You know, as well as seeing what house people put various characters in, I really like seeing how different people portray the first day of classes - what teachers they have teaching the various subjects (since Herbology is about the only one we know for sure who teaches it) and what their classes are like.

Hmm, I wonder could Hugo have that condition - is it called synaesthesia or something? - where people's senses get mixed up. It might make him hear colours. It wouldn't explain why he heard music at the station though or why he didn't seem to hear it elsewhere. Just considered it because of how trying to colour change the sock seemed to cause him to hear music.

One thing that sounds a bit weird is when Molly is talking about what houses they are in and so on, she says "any different". "Any differences" would seem to make more sense.

You've also written "you will discover example of this" about the rule "what happens in Hogwarts stays in Hogwarts." I presume it should be "examples".

Hmm, that part about him not showing any magic is interesting. I kind of doubt he'd get to Hogwarts if he was a Squib though. I think there's something more mysterious going on here. Interesting.

Author's Response: Hi again!

First off, thanks for pointing out those errors, I'll correct them as soon as the queue re-opens.

You're right, Hugo isn't a Squib, he's just having difficulties adjusting right now due to various reasons...

Thanks again for the review, I'm happy you seem intrigued by my story so far :)

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