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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! Wow, this is a really intriguing story! A Black family gathering turned into a murder-mystery whodunnit? This is really wonderful stuff :)

I think you created the perfect murder mystery atmosphere through the descriptive details of setting and characterisation. The mood of the story was chilling, suspenseful and definitely full of tension and mystery. The imagery was great; the scene was very realistic and you have quite the eye for detail.

Another amazing thing was the characterisation. It isn't easy to begin a chapter with such a large cast of characters and make them different from each other, but you managed this rather effortlessly. There's Bellatrix with her cold boredom and utter inability for empathy (and probably made to look guilty as well), Pollux as the patriarch of the family with his commanding presence and sense of authority, Barty Crouch (my personal favourite :)) who is so manically intelligent, Narcissa who's all frail and vulnerable, and so on. You've really brought the Black family to life here, and all in the first chapter!

This has been a very thrilling and enjoyable read. Great work! I can't wait for you to update this; I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for this story! Good luck with the coming chapters :)

-teh

Author's Response: Hey there - and thanks so much! I love mysteries myself so I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Thank you again! It's been a while since I read a murder mystery (Agatha Christie all the way...) and this is a bit more gothic (it's the Blacks, so of course it had to be!) than standard ones, I think, so I didn't really know what to do about the mood, so I'm so glad you liked it!

THE CAST. OH MY GOD, THE CAST. I swear, they're going to kill me. I never realised having such a huge cast would be so difficult, but it really is. I always forget to include someone and it's a pain to have to work out what everyone's doing at a certain point in time... Barty Crouch is kinda sinisterly adorable... but he's a little conspiracy theorist :)

Thank you so much for the wonderful review! :)

Aph xx


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