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Review:teh tarik says:
Hellooo there! I choked a bit when I saw my name...er...penname in your dedication! Wow! Thank you so much for that :D

And things just keep getting more and more interesting with your story and characters. So many details about Fee's past being dropped in. You reveal character backstory very skillfully; there's no info-dumping and the story pacing has been very good so far. And Tom and Fee...aaahh I don't know how to describe them. There's so many lovely contrasts with their relationship - I mean there are some nice hot chocolate moments...and a few lines later they're both seriously making plans for world domination! I find them very darkly adorable, if such a description even makes sense :P Fiona's changed so much since the first chapter, or at least her character has been developed very well. I remember she was feeling all romantic about weddings back then...her motives are revealed so well, and did I mention the story pacing is just wonderful? There's always some new aspect of Fee's characterisation shown in each chapter.

I think you're also doing a great job in portraying Walburga's slow decline into alcoholism and instability. I'm probably going to dislike her a bit as your story goes on. And perhaps there might be more conflict between her and Fee...seeing that Fee's mentor is none other than Septimus Weasley, who married Cedrella on the same date as Walburga's own wedding. And that animosity shown by Septimus towards Fee was pretty unexpected...but it is exciting, and I'm curious to see how their work relationship will turn out.

Alright, well, this has been a really exciting chapter! Things are definitely picking up, and becoming more interesting, and the darker sides of the characters are being revealed, slowly :) I'm very glad you let me know about the update :) Do let me know again the next time you update; I tend to lose track of stories way too easily...

Great work and good luck with the coming chapters! And many hugs and thanks again for the lovely dedication :DDD

-teh

Author's Response: Awww, it's no problem at all. Thank -YOU- for all of your lovely reviews! ♥

Thank you! Info-dumping is definitely one of my pet peeves, so I try to avoid it and I'm glad to see that I succeeded! I'm so glad that the story pacing is good; I was worried it might be going too slowly because we had two and a half chapters set on the same day...

Ahh, you wouldn't be the only one who ships Tom and Fee! I get feels about them while writing the story, and I'm the author who has control of their future. I know what happens in the next few chapters, and even -I'm- wishing I didn't. *whimpers*

Oh, I especially love that bit! I thought Fee was getting a bit too nice, so I decided to show more of her "Tommy side". I wanted to make it much more clearer -why- she and Tom are best friends. :D Darkly adorable is an oxymoron, so yes, it does make sense! I love that description!

With regard to Fee, I wanted to display her several sides. She tends to change personality depending on who she's around- the worried, comforting best friend to Walburga, the evil world dominator with Tom, the prankster with Alphard and I wanted to highlight that. In addition, the wedding was a good day (well, until Walburga lost the plot) and therefore Fee would have been in a good mood and rather contemplative. Yup, you did mention the story pacing already! I hope to continue that; I would love for Fiona Phoenix to be a mystery until the very end! XD

Thank you; I hope I manage to keep up this great job! Maybe, maybe not. :P Walburga will definitely be annoyed at Fee, but she finds herself in a vulnerable position. Shutting up now as I've said far too much already...

Conflict between Fee and Septimus?! Is the sky blue?! Is the grass green?! Yes, yes, YES! (Excuse the hyperactivity...) I don't think Septimus' animosity was unexpected though; he's a Gryffindor and she's a Slytherin and those Houses have never liked each other. Plus, she has connections to the pure-blood society, and he is a disowned blood traitor so it's highly doubtful that he would actually like her. I'm sure Roy Savage is curious too, wondering if they're going to survive putting up with each other for long periods of time...

Thank you! XD Not a problem at all, and I will! I have the same problem haha, I just tend to add them into my favourites and check every now and then. ;) But I -will- let you know.

Thank you! Many hugs to you too, and thanks again for your lovely reviews! ♥

-Katie

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