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Review:caoty says:
Hey there, I'm from review tag.

So, Daphne. I'm not sure how much Daphne fic you've read, but I tend to read quite a bit, and it's very refreshing to see your non-impossibly-beautiful-ice-queen characterisation of her! She feels realistic and human, and that's great.

Theo also feels real, even though we haven't actually met him yet. It's really cool how you've introduced him; he's a kind of present absence, so that by the time he turns up in person to this fic, we're almost as familiar with him as Daphne is. Very clever.

The way you've incorporated the darker undertone of post-war guilt and politics into this is also very well done. It's not something you can shake off easily even as you move on and are known for fantastic carrot cake rather than being the heiress to a wealthy neutral Slytherin family, and you've clearly shown that.

I've got a minor nitpick for you:

Iím going to spend all evening mopping up, she reflected

With the domestic charms that Daphne uses throughout this chapter, this feels a tad bit incongruous, don't you think? :P

Anyway - well done, and good luck writing. This could turn out to be something great. :)

Author's Response: Hello there!

It's good to know that you like Daphne. I haven't actually read many stories about her, so it's great to hear that she sounds realistic from someone who has!
I'm really pleased you picked up on the thing about Theo too, because I quite consciously wanted to make his presence felt, even though he's not technically in this chapter.

Post-war guilt, and the war's effects on Daphne's generation, are (hopefully!) going to be quite a major part of this story, so I'm glad that there's some
suggestion of that already.
And thanks for pointing out that inconsistency! I'll go back and rephrase :P

Thankyou so much for the review! I really appreciate it! :)



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