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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! So began reading chapter 1, then realized after the first few sentences I'd already read it! So I'm here to do two for the Holiday Swap :)

I love how you stick with the old times feeling in this. Maids at the door, knockers, large ceilings.. It all feels very medieval and I really love that.

I'm just as curious about this society as I was back when I read the first chapter! It's very clearly not a good thing, and something Persephone never had a chance at getting away from. I do hope you continue this story, because these first few chapters really are very interesting and original.

I think you get in a decent amount of detail, especially considering this is first person. I'm also impressed with how well you hold her narrative voice. From the first chapter on it stays the same, and she seems like a very solid character so far.

I loved that you used the Unbreakable vow. It reminded me that we were in the Harry Potter world. And the constant reminders of her being a woman. You could tell she'd dealt with being looked down, thought lesser of, because of her gender for some time now.

I really enjoyed this second chapter, m'dear!

Jami

Author's Response: Thankyouthankyouthankyou!!

I'm really glad that you liked the second chapter, and I'm glad that I was able to keep the voice constant. I was kind of worried that this chapter would be a bit wonky, and so it took me MONTHS to finally get it posted.

And I hope that I can keep up this story, too. So far, I haven't started the third chapter, boohoo. :(
It would really be an awesome thing to do with my time, but alas, I have no time...

Ah, well. Thank you for all of your lovely compliments!! :D

Merry Christmas!

~UnluckyStar57


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