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Review:SilentConfession says:
I could tell it was a dream pretty early by the language you were using and just the overall tone of it. I thought it was a nice touch because it shows a lot about your character right away and it gave us an idea of how much she cares about healing and her job. It makes her hating being late and irresponsible more poignant and real. I wish we had spells as quick as her to make hair lay flat so quickly, it would be helpful for when I lay in! ;D

I really like the set up you have with this story and i've always had this idea that St. Mungo's could be a really interesting place for a first war story to take place. I connected to it because I suppose i see it the same way (at least, from what i get from the summary) that the Order may use it for their own advantage and that they wouldn't necessarily go there to be healed as the years go on because of mistrust and fear of which side the Healers are one. This is really intriguing and i'm definitely interested in reading more after this point.

I liked how Sirius introduced himself, he has this cocky way about him in your story that we can already tell which is great since we see so little of him. Although, it was a little hard to imagine she wouldn't have been able to figure out who it was as not many people were called Sirius at that time i don't think... though i suppose it would depend on their association at Hogwarts where she'd make that connection or not.

Lia also seems to be interesting and i think she'll be a strong voice to tell your story. I wonder how Sirius or the Order will convince them to help her and basically throw away her dreams of being a big time Healer.

Anywa, overall, i think this was a great first chapter and i really enjoyed reading this! It's a really interesting premise!

Author's Response: Hey SilentConfession!

I'm glad you could tell, I always think things are obvious because I'm writing them haha, so it was nice to see that the tone came across nicely. I figured the POV switch really helped too. Haha - I wish I had spells for many reasons, the top ones being that I'm lazy and Accio would be my best friend.

I think so too! I see it as middle ground, but not really because people have prejudices no matter where they are. It's certainly a dynamic setting for war. I'm glad this interests you :)

I think Lia tried to repress his existence and the name "Siriusly" wouldn't have phased her because she wasn't expecting him you know? Maybe? She knew him the moment she saw him, I mean he's pretty unforgettable haha (girl crush).

Yeah, I love Lia and I think it will be a fun ride! Well, not fun actually but dynamic. Hope you come back and check out the rest :)

Thanks so much for reviewing - it was a lovely response!


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