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Review:CherryBoom says:
Hi! I'm here for the holiday review! =)

I really liked this chapter, especially the last part of it. I wrote a one-shot recently about Sirius chasing Wormtail after his escape in Hogwarts, so I connected with this story immediately.

It was interesting that some parts of this chapter was in little snippets and two were almost one-shots on their own. In a way, it kind of reminded me about how Sirius's mind wasn't all that clear while he was in Azkaban. And then when his mind got clearer towards the end, the parts got longer.

I loved the idea of the confrontation between Mrs. Potter and Mrs. Black. That would have been a sight to behold. And Remus and Peter playacting the scene was so funny. =)

But what struck me most was definitely the last part. The way you described how Sirius scented summer from Fudge's clothes and it envigorated him, was pure poetry. I loved their awkward discussion as well. Like how Fudge was drawn to this peculiar murderer and how Sirius tried to have a civil conversation with him. The part where he found about Peter was heartbreaking. To realize after all those years, that a rat still lives and is right there in Hogwarts must've been a devastating. The escape was so bittersweet.

Your writing was just brilliant and filled with excellent similes, like the one comparing his laugh with snapping of a stick of chalk. Yeah, I'm a fan. =P

This was wonderful chapter and after I get more tissues and less red eyes (I cried my eyes out), I'll continue reading this fic. Thank you for it. It was amazing.

Author's Response: Hi CherryBoom! Sorry it's taken me so long to respond to this lovely review.

I'll have to give your Sirius one-shot a read if you've uploaded it! Yeah, honestly when I was writing this I wrote it as a series of small sections/one-shots, and then on the second draft I linked them together. Flashcards were involved!

I'm glad you liked the Mrs Potter/Mrs Black silliness - I wanted to show Remus and Peter as the boys they once were.

I loved writing the Fudge scene! Heehee. So awkward but so intrigued.

Well, thank you very very much for your comments on my writing and on this chapter - I'm very happy that you enjoyed them both! Hope you enjoy the rest of the story :)

And sorry for making you cry!

Athene xo


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