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Review:Juicey_Moosey says:
Coming from the Holiday Review Swap :)

So, I've been reading 'etc. etc. (and life goes on)' for ages now, as in I can't wait for the updates etc, but I'm pretty certain I have never reviewed any of the chapters before :| (I'm sorry! don't shoot/jinx/hex me...) Anyway:
I really like the beginning of this, it's a good mix between introduction and action - which I always mess up - because it gives us all the info we need (There's nothing more annoying for me than reaching the end of a chapter and not knowing who the character is...) but it doesn't give the whole plot line away.
I like the way you've mentioned/made her a relation of Rita Skeeter; it gives us an idea of why Clemence is the editor of Witchy Business, and almost makes her seem slightly innocent, like she had been brought up believing what she's doing is okay... (I think this is me just over-analysing this, English at school makes you analyse EVERYTHING. And I mean Everything.) I also love the characterisation of them all (Dom, Pickett, Clemence etc.) because they seem so... normal... Dom strikes me as that person that people suspect has some form of OCD just because she appreciates position and layout; and then I love Pickett and his punctuation, he reminds me of myself, and Clemence of my English teacher, especially when we're getting marked on SPAG. Then Clemence is just... she seems so... Eughh, this is so hard because I've read the rest -facepalm- I don't know, there's just something about her... I also like the semi-cliffanger, I think it creates that sort of suspence that keeps your reader hooked.
But I really enjoyed this chapter, and it's nice to be able re-read it and finally leave you a review ;)
Bye for now :)

Author's Response: Oooh I had no idea you've read everything! :D I got really lucky with the intro to etc, I think, because I knew exactly what scenes I wanted to start with -- especially the bit on how gossip spreads through the school.

Dom's graphic nitpicks are totally my own! I was Graphics editor back in high school, and I should not have Clemence speaking of comma abuse when I abuse it so blatantly in my own writing, but alas xD

It's strange to read early Clemence sometimes, because she's so blithely confident and nothing's wrong and she's always on top... until it all slowly slips away. Her narration style even changes.

♥ thank you!

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