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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there Roots! Returning your review for the holiday swap thing :D

This is a really lovely but heartbreaking story! Not many writers can deal with a mature and difficult subject like Alzheimer's in such a realistic way as you have. Well done for that. Your attention to detail is wonderful - not just the way you portrayed Ginny's slow decline, but also Harry's dedication and pain at seeing her in such a state. Your characterisation is fresh as well; I especially adored the depiction of Daphne as the loving, devoted wife. I loved the fact that Daphne and Ginny were on good terms and that the latter was very supportive of Harry's new marriage. Their divorce was dealt with very sensibly and it is such a relief from the endless messy and angsty emotional breakups so prevalent in fanfics :) As I mentioned earlier, you certainly deal with these sort of mature topics very well, without lapsing into melodrama. And there was a very realistic sense of bewilderment from the other Weasley family members, especially George.

I think your story flowed really well, and the pacing was good. The dialogue was realistic and natural.

And the ending segment was beautifully done! I love the repetition of sentence structures in the last bit: "she looked like..." That was just lovely to read :D And while Ginny's death was tragic, you skillfully avoided excessive sentimentality and instead made it a very poignant moment. There's a sort of lovely intimacy implied with Harry staying with Ginny until her last breath, perhaps still some residue from their old relationship?

All in all, this was a wonderful story and I enjoyed reading it very much. You have a lovely natural style, and the dialogue along with the narrative bits flowed very well. Once again, great work! And thanks so very much for choosing to do the swap with me :D

-teh

Author's Response: Hello! I'm so sorry it's taken me such a long time to respond!

I'm pleased that you think that I did a good job with my depiction of Alzheimer's. I did a lot of research on the subject before I even attempted to start writing the story.

I'm so glad that you liked my characterization. I had some negative comments about my decision to have Daphne be Harry's wife at this point in his life, so I'm really pleased that it worked with you.

I'm glad that you think that I successfully avoided melodrama- I tried really hard myself to avoid writing it because I think that it would have lessened the impact of the story.

As well, I'm pleased that you liked how I wrote the ending segment. I had a bit of a debate with myself about how exactly I wanted the story to end. I knew that it would involve her death but I wasn't sure exactly what direction I wanted to go in. I was very happy with the direction I eventually decided upon.

I don't know if I would say that the intimacy came from their romantic relationship but rather from the fact that they shared the majority of their lives together. They were still good friends when it happened and she lived with him until her death.

I really do have to read the second chapter of your story! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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