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Review:justonemorefic says:
Hee, I remember that note of you saying there exists an Edie in your fic, who happens to be cast with Kate Nash, who plays Hannah in mine; I love her pictures, they are of the ultimate derp 8D ANYHOW.

YES DRUNK PEOPLE. DRUNK PEOPLE ARE THE MOST ENTERTAINING PEOPLE because they make bad decisions and say, er shout terrible things. Hee, there is something about Dean's glasses tangling in her hair that is oh so cute (+ Donald Glover love :3 Community fan by any chance?).

I LOVE SEAMUS. I LOVE THAT WHOLE PARAGRAPH OF HIS RESPECTING WOMEN BY FLIRTING AND HIS MUM AND GARLIC POTATO PANCAKES of which I am jealous AND THAT HE GETS UNNATURALLY ANGRY AT MENTIONS OF LEPRECHAUNS (I suppose gnomes and dwarves are a no-go too?)

Oh my god the unmentionable pick up line, that is a win for her. She must get it from her granny. WHO I LOVE ALSO.

And so my running commentary ends. It was a little jumpy inbetween the explanations and the present action. I love the descriptions of the bar from the beginning and I'd love to see it kept up more along the way, especially since it gets a bit info-heavy as you get on in the chapter, and it can start feeling like a load of characters introduced. I get super attached to blocks of info too, but I usually end up cutting them out when my gut tells me it's reading too long, even if it means skipping out on a few nuggets of wit (but I do have a personal bias in which brevity always triumphs).

But it was superbly entertaining to read; you've got a knack for timing, and all your characters are so cute :3 You have may picked up that I absolutely laaav bromancing, and fella-mates along with lady-mates--basically all the people one gets sloshed with (I TOO AM AN ENABLER, DEAN AND SEAM), so I'm happy to see them borderline drunk chorus lining already 8D

♥!

Author's Response: Why hello! :)

I am glad that our love for Donald Glover and Kate Nash is mutual! I have only seen a select handfuls of Community, but what little I've seen of him has cracked me up. I also love Childish Gambino, so there's that... :D

Seamus is my absolute favorite to write EVAR. I used to RP him forever ago, and had so much fun!

I've gone back and fixed some of the jumpiness with the narrative, but I think I have yet to upload that version to HPFF. I'm also waiting for the right moment to remove all of the stuff about Justin and put it somewhere else in the story, but I just haven't found the right place yet. Bah! But I really appreciate your comment about continuing to describe the bar as the chapter goes on; I'll definitely give that a go during one of my many editing sprees! :)

Thank you so much! I love, love, LOVE your stories and writing style and your characterization, so it's really nice to hear that you enjoyed my story!


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