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Review:Elenia says:
Hello, dear. I'm here to return our Holiday swap ^^

Oh wow! What a chapter once again! This turned out to be completely different from what I expected (in a good way as always) I was't expecting it to be so action-filled, something I think I should've because you're a master writing those scenes! But more from that later.

The Memory Chapter! Such a clever idea! I'm in awe! How did you come up with that? I mean, to see it in action like that, it makes perfect sense that the Ministry has a Memory Chamber!

I can only imagine the looks on the Wizengamot members faces when they saw that memory. All that death and destruction *shudders* and so many of them were just kids! I can understand why they were just staring at the memory and didn't notice the change in Greyback before it was too late.

But a bunch of cowards they were! Hermione had to fight that thing all by herself (well Albus helped) and they just watched?

But Hermione and Albus were great! Perfect in fact! I really enjoyed reading that scene. Once again you managed to bring it to life and I was leaning closer to my laptop screen so I could get the maximun effect. It's so absorbing! And I'm left with a feeling that I want to fight too, I want to help! (x

Okay, trying to calm down now and stop fangirling... But I know where I'm coming if I ever need inspiration to write a fighting scene!

I think Albus's reaction was great. His doubts in the beginning and that one line: 'but the full moon was three weeks away'. That doesn't matter a thing in Greyback's case.

I really liked the fact that even though Hermione told him to run, he didn't. Reminded me so much of Harry right there.

One question! Just something that I pondered while reading this, but it's not a big deal really. It just struck me as bit odd that Kingsley wasn't there. I mean, the Wizengamot gatherings we witnessed in the books, Fudge was always the 'chairman' in those. So why not include him? Although while I was writing this, I remembered the hearings Harry witnessed through the pensieve and Croutch Sr. was leading those, and he wasn't a minister. So you can ignore me completely d:

Ooh, I wasn't expecting Seamus be the one who send the package! Such a nice twist! And I know exactly what you mean, it's stuck in my head too that he and Lavender were together.

But I really liked the ending! It tied this whole story together very nicely!

Oh, and this in completely your fault! Ever since I made you that banner, I've got Paramore's Monster stuck in my head! Seriously, I can't get rid of it!

Well done, Dan! Once again d: You have such a talent for writing and I always enjoy every second of reading your wonderful stories!

Write more! And take care ^^

~E

Author's Response: Sigh. I feel bad about going 2 whole days without responding to this. I can blame it on the review swap and that would be partly true, but I also really love seeing it on my unanswered reviews page. So awesome!

Anyhow, I'm glad that after all this time I'm still able to surprise you every once in a while. This story was originally meant to be a one-shot, but it got so long and it had such a natural-feeling break point in the middle. I'm really pleased with how it worked out.

The Memory Chamber occurred to me when I was trying to figure out how on earth I was going to write a scene where one quarter of the members of the Wizengamot tried to pile into the same penseive. It wasn't going very well, as you might imagine. So I thought, hey, why not have an entire room that's one big penseive? The rest, as they say, is history. "I tried writing it the other way and it sounded stupid" is the mother of invention. ;)

It's true that nobody really jumped in to help Hermione fight Greyback except for Albus, but at the some time I'm not sure how much help she really wanted. It must have been deeply satisfying for her to take the monster down. That's all I'm saying.

I love writing fight scenes. Feel free to run anything by me that you like. Because, sooner or later, I think TntLY could use a good fight scene. ;)

Albus was really fun and useful to have around. He's a fresh set of eyes, not biased by all of the history that Hermione has with Greyback. He's willing to give Greyback a chance. Sure, it's the wrong decision, but you can see how he'd arrive at it.

I'm not sure whether I believe that Kingsley is still Minister at this time. I recall reading somewhere that Kingsley never planned to serve as Minister for very long. He made many important changes and cleaned house at the Ministry, but I can't see him as a career politician.

Somewhere along the way, I picked up a really lovely bit of head canon that had Seamus and Lavender in a very deep but secret relationship during the year that Snape and the Carrows ran Hogwarts. It's not canon, obviously, but if it's true, he must have been deeply hurt by her death. And he's hot-tempered enough to have wanted to take revenge on Greyback.

Sorry, I can't take credit for infecting your head with songs I don't know. :-P

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for reading and all your lovely reviews!


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