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Review:CambAngst says:
Ho, ho, ho! This is your Holiday Review Swap Extravaganza Thingee review! It's been such a long time since I read and reviewed anything of yours. I figured I'd try something of intermediate length.

I really, really liked your James and Lily in this. There was an easy quality to their interaction, perfectly natural to two people who've known each other for a long time and gradually come to an understanding about one another. James was the gallant knight in shining armor, come to rescue his princess from, er, well rain. It was a pretty big deal to him, I'm sure. Lily, of course, is no ordinary damsel in distress. She may fancy James, but she's still not going to let him get the best of her.

I love the gradual game of one-upmanship that the two of them play. James is probing to see where her tolerance for his advances will end and she's looking for new and interesting ways to push his buttons. All in all, it seems pretty evenly matched. She has so many arrows in the quiver, so many little ways that she can step out of the mold of "prim and proper Head Girl Lily Evans" and shock him while he's just incorrigible.

Suggestions? I think it would have been fun if she'd played a little harder to get, once she realizes that he isn't going to turn her down. Granted, she's already compromised her position, but I think a clever girl like her could overcome that disadvantage. When he starts to act full of himself or move that hand a little lower, she could have pulled away... taking his umbrella with her, of course. It's just a thought. Honestly, this is lovely exactly the way you wrote it.

James and Lily are one of my favorite romantic pairings in the series, and this was a very warm, funny, happy take on the two of them. I enjoyed reading it. Happy holidays!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it and felt like their relationship was both funny and natural. I'm not sure I'm going to change the umbrella scene here in the way you suggested, but I love the suggestion and will definitely keep it in mind for a future chapter, because that's definitely something I can see her doing.

Thank you so much for your lovely review, and I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond!


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