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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Wow. Iím not usually one that can get into Marauder Era stories, for some reason or another, but as soon as I started this chapter, I was sucked in. It flowed from one detail to the next and you sort of lead me as a reader through the chapter. You started with the basics, the house. Then moved onto the house elves, then Kreacher bringing up the juice and then Regulus, then Sirius and then the family mealÖit really was easy to visualize as you transitioned from one thing to the next. I really did enjoy it!

Also, brilliant characterization. I love Regulus and how he acts towards Kreacher and his parents. Itís pretty telling of his character, though we donít know too much about him from the books. Your description is actually pretty accurate as to how Iíve always seen Regulus in my head, which was sort of awesome. Sirius was also well characterized. His lack of interest when it comes to what his parents do and donít approve of and then, of course, his more than happy departure from his parentsí houseÖdefinitely within his character.

Overall, I really enjoyed this chapter. The flow and the entire style of writing were just fantastic. It was really easy to get into and I hope to return to read some more chapters soon! :D

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: Hello, and thanks for coming by :)

It's so great that you were drawn into this opening chapter! I'm happy that the details worked well and that the imagery was good. I tried to make it easy to picture the Black house.

Regulus has been really tough for me to figure out, but I'm having fun molding him little by little. I want him to be markedly kind toward Kreacher, but not too kind to be out of character for someone who will eventually become a Death Eater. I'm glad you liked Sirius, too; lots of cliches to keep away from there. I tried to make it clear that he and his family are not on good terms, but without any over-the-top screaming or physical violence. Unfortunately, things will be more tense later.

Thanks again for this lovely review! I do hope you come back to read on at a later time :)

-Amanda


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