|Review:||Toujours Padfoot says:|
I'm a sucker for sociopath stories, so I was pretty stoked to see this gem in your thread!
You did a wonderful job with Bellatrix here. I've noticed that some authors have been influenced by Bellatrix in the films - whose malice was watered down slightly in favor of making her more of a caricature, a humorous loon - but you didn't make her the witch you can passively laugh at because she's crazy. Here, you made her the same kind of crazy that she was in the books. You made her intimidating, erratic, and unpredictable. There was a real darkness that made me shiver, even in her moment of lucidity with the emerald necklace.
Her mood can really snap at the drop of a hat! I can tell that Narcissa walks on eggshells around her, lest she say the wrong thing. You portrayed how Narcissa has to choose her words carefully, trying to make Bellatrix forget her anger when Narcissa said she fought for family, by flattering her. Comparing her to her idol, Voldemort, was a deft move that anyone with a more clear and stout mind might have right away recognized as flattery. But Bellatrix was eager to accept it.
I liked this line in particular:
I have no need for your concern, go shower your son with it, he clearly needs it more than I.
- This has got to incense Narcissa a lot more than she can reveal. Being just outside the Dark Lord's circle has granted her some perspective that the others don't have. It's the only way she's kept herself and her family alive for all these years, after all. She's not stupid. So even though everyone is constantly mocking Draco and Lucius (and I love how Bellatrix regards him as her sister's 'pet', not thinking anything of it and just viewing them as people there to serve Voldemort who then fell short of that task and are no longer worthy of her notice), she has to put up with it. Clearly, she is a woman just waiting for everything to end. And Bellatrix is the polar opposite, waiting for everything to begin. She has deluded herself into thinking that the Dark Lord is infallible. Her outlook, her scattered thoughts and the way she's just standing there at a broken window, letting the cold and rain sweep inside, was excellent.
My favorite line, though, is the very last one, after she re-broke the window. It speaks of her character, that she prefers the broken and cold and damaged.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I think one of the most interesting things about Bellatrix besides her insanity is her relationship with other characters besides the Dark Lord. And in HBP you see this entire other side to her when she is chasing after Narcissa, you start to think...maybe there is this human side to her after all. So I think that was something that I really wanted to show while I was writing this that, despite that she is legitimately insane, despite the entire beginning part where she is just jumping around from thought to crazy thought, that there is some part of her that wishes her sister well.
She has no love for Lucius, that much is true, and I enjoyed exploring that little side of her. I truly think she is one of the most interesting characters of the series, simply because she is just so irrational and she could do different thing at any moment.
Anyway, thank you again so much for your review I really appreciate it!