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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Oh my goodness, your banner is BEAUTIFUL! :O

But onto the story...

Well I, for one, really like Percy Weasley. You seem to have a really good grasp on his character, even down to the mundane yet stressful activities of his to-do list. Also, I love that Hermione is writing a biography of the trio--is that canon? Either way, it's a great idea to include it.

This line is wonderful: I take a deep breath and and say something I’ve never had the guts to say before in my life. “Surprise me.”


I think that your spacing needs some work; it's kind of confusing as to why some sections of dialogue are lumped together and others aren't.

I love that Audrey played that joke on Percy to get him to lighten up; she seems to be just what he needs right now. And the ending scene with Percy on his balcony is perfect--I like that you included that the railing was rusty, because I just can't picture Percy Weasley in a swanky apartment XD

Really great story. I'm glad I got to review!

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thank you! I had my favourite artist at TDA make it. Dawne is amazing :)

Thanks! I don't think that it actually is canon, but hey, I assume that she would! It just seems like something Hermione would do.

Well, I'm glad you liked that bit! It gives everyone a bit of a sense into what Percy's character is like from the books, someone who needs their life under wraps, and is only now, willing to take chances and risks.

I actually just fixed that, and put it into the queue a couple of hours ago, so thanks for letting me know!

Audrey is one hell of a character, and the fact that she is just so different to Percy, and so light-hearted is why Percy likes her. And yes, he does need some fun in his life at the moment ;)

Well, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed that scene! I actually didn't plan to write that bit. It just happened, but i felt that it kind of fit in there. And I can't imagine him living in one either. It's just not him!

Again, thank you so much for your very lovely review!

- Abhi


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