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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hey girl!

I still really like how you're exploring two characters who are really under loved. It's really interesting to read them simply because we know so little about who they were at Hogwarts. I think you're doing a good job at fleshing your characters out and giving them a voice.

You have a really lovely way of mixing dialogue and description so i don't feel like this chapter was dominated by either. I think it made it easier to read and imagine what your characters are doing and thinking. You've also really captured some really common, everyday things that i think helps us relate to Theo. I can't say the amount of times i've been at a job i don't care too much about and i just want the day to end but the clock doesn't seem to be moving at all!

The only thing i'd give as critique is that there are some spelling errors (apparate for instance) and it seemed strange that the boss would be giving Theo more responsibility since, at this point anyway, he hasn't shown any love for his job or showing that he was good at it. I'm guess Theo's feelings or special aptitude toward his job will be explained later :P.

This was a good chapter though and i think you're really helping push the story forward. I'm really curious to know Tracey's feelings towards him because she seemed a little cold to him, though, that may come from the fact that she has a child and she doesn't want to muck about.

Author's Response: Yeah Tracey's feelings are more that she does have a child that she needs to think about and she knows that its hard to find a guy who would be willing to just jump right into a family life. I can never seem to spell that word right no matter how many times its in a story, sigh. Hopefully some day I will come back to this story as I enjoyed it very much and it seems like everyone else has been as well! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review!

~Slytherinchica08~


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