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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! I'm here for the Holiday Review Swap.

I will start off by saying that this is such a captivating beginning to a story. Starting at the end (or somewhere in the middle)... Allowing us to see just how far Viktor has fallen and the intensity (and complexity) of his emotions towards Rose Weasley... I'm very curious to see where this story will go.

I think that you've done a beautiful job with your description in this chapter. Viktor's despair (well, no, not quite despair... Depression? The low to which he's sunk?) pours off the page and the tenseness is quite evident as well.

Your characterization is very good as well. It's really interesting, because you've managed to age a character we saw only sporadically for about a book and a half believably, and put him into a situation I'm sure that no one thought would happen. Viktor Krum- involved in a relationship with someone thirty years his junior? Viktor Krum- a Quidditch has-been? Injured too badly to play?

Viktor Krum and Rose Weasley... Though the pairing is unusual, you already have me mostly sold on the idea because of the passion Viktor displayed in this chapter. It really makes me wonder what exactly happened to their relationship; how they dealt with the multitude of problems they faced, none the least of which was probably Ron and Hermione's reaction.

Your summary at the end of the chapter gives many questions and hints as to the many problems they will face during this story- but it gives no answers (as I suppose a good summary should do). I'm very curious as to where Viktor is, for the man he's with for the majority of the chapter seemed a little too rude and aggressive for a mental hospital (though I've never visited one and this could actually be typical behaviour in one...).

I'm sorry if this review seems a little jumbled- I'm a little on the tired side. But I did really enjoy this chapter and I'm certain I will read on to the next when I next have time. Great work! :D

Author's Response: Thank you, Root. I didn't think your review was jumbled at all. I appreciate the time you took to read and review the chapter.

I'm glad you liked the characterization of Krum. He's fallen a long way from the boy in GoF, but hopefully the changes are believable. Once he's not able to do the thing he'd been famous for from such a young age, might it not sort of push him off the deep-end? At least that's part of what I'm playing with in terms of his character.

And I know the pairing is a bit odd, but it makes me glad to hear that you can already buy into it a bit. There relationship isn't all scandal. They do genuinely care for each other, and in the end, I hope that readers can root for them as a pair.

And you're right, I don't think that would be normal treatment of a patient in a mental hospital. This is actually meant to be more of a prison. It's only truly a madhouse in Krum's mind.

Thanks again for such a nice review!


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