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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! What a funny coincidence: you reviewed me before I got a chance to review you like I was planning to... But now I'm finally here to return your lovely review!

You know, I don't think that I've ever read a zombie story before, or watched a zombie movie. I've been more interested in werewolves and vampires... But this story has proved to be very intriguing. For Harry to turn into a zombie... For him to be the monster in this situation... It will definitely take some time for me to wrap my head around the idea of Harry being the dangerous person (or zombie) in this story. To me, he's always been the hero.

That definitely isn't to say that this is a bad idea- just that it's very, very original and unique.

I think that you did a great job with the beginning of this story. You've set up a plausible situation in which Hermione would attempt to bring her best friend back to life, regardless of the cautions around necromancy. To be surrounded by friends who are deeply grieving... To have lost the person you are closest to in your life... To have the opportunity to fix everything through magic... I can definitely understand why she did what she did.

And the process by which she tried to reanimate Harry was logical and her desperateness answers why she would continue even when everything seemed to be going wrong.

Though I imagine that this story will become very action packed in the coming chapters (she does have to kill a zombie, after all), I think that it would be great if, in this chapter, you elaborated a little bit more on what she was feeling. After all, her actions here are driven primarily by the emotions she feels and witnesses.

However, I do think that you characterized Hermione well. As I mentioned before, your Hermione is logical and closely attached to Harry (and Ron... But he died a long time ago). She tries to let reason guide her actions, even though she occasionally lets emotion rule her actions.

All in all, I think that you're off to a great start in what is sure to be a fantastically action-filled story. Who knows- perhaps I will come to love zombies just as much as the other magical creatures. Good work! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!

I really enjoyed writing this first chapter, to set the stage for the action that was to come. I think Hermione is in a very fragile state here and of course she does something that is not exactly rational.

I do understand the need for more of what she was feeling. I think the reason I wrote it the way I did was that she didn't really have a lot of time to...feel, if you know what I mean. When she got the idea she just...went. But I definitely understand it and I'll take it under consideration when I edit again :) But I will say you definitely get more feeling and emotion the further you read on in the story.

Thank you so much for reading this I really appreciate it!


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