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Review:Cirque Du Freak says:
This was so interesting to read!

I felt like Tracey was telling the reader a lot about herself though, it was a bit mechanical, if you get what I mean. The first chapter doesn't necessarily have to be the be all and end all of the story - take your time, make your audience dance around and kept on their toes so they naturally lurch forward for more. You can always show flashbacks with conversations and let the reader make their mind up of whats happening. You have lots to work with and enough potential. :)

I liked the change of POV - it seemed like you enjoyed writing Theo a lot more, I felt like that particular section was very easy to read and flowed really well. You just need to make sure that its like that for the whole chapter!

Lots of brilliant potential and, really, I look forward to reading the next chapter when its out. :D

Author's Response: Hey thanks so much for the review! I do have a beta now for this story so hopefully they will be able to help me make the whole thing flow and read easily. The hardest part is that I have so many main characters so its hard to know what the information can get to be too much. I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading this and I do hope that you continue to read! Thanks for taking the time to read and review!

~Slytherinchica08~


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