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Review:LovlyRita says:
Hi there!

Well I have to say that you did a brilliant job with this character. She is a Ravenclaw through and through, so worried about her tests and the books. I absolutely loved how very stereotypically Ravenclaw she was!

For example, the entire PARAGRAPH you spent about the library and the books, that was just brilliant. Studying and book clearly are one of the most important things to her, and because you established that so very well early on, her heartbreak was palpable when the egg incident occurred.

And her reaction was so angry toward the girl, as if something really horribly awful had happened to her, which clearly in her mind it had. And part of me was really happy that Flitwick called her out too, because she was kind of mean to the poor girl.

The level of detail in this is stunning. To me, it's the small things that really make this story pop. Because let's be honest, at it's core it is a story about a girl who loves and cherishes books, she goes and eats breakfast while studying, and as she leaves a girl bumps into her and ruins the book.

But it's the way you TELL it, like it's the most captivating story ever. The emotion leaps off the page, you feel this girl's despair. Her annoyance at her friends and their habits, the break in her routine (I think Marianna might be a tad OCD) it just all flows together and makes a nice, well rounded piece of fiction.

I really enjoyed reading this story, and I look forward to reading on :)

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm so glad that you liked Marianna. She's certainly a character- she displays her House traits very solidly. I wonder how Ron would have reacted to her in first year, if he thought Hermione was bad... :D

I'm glad that everything fit together nicely. It was very important to me that I described just how important her studies and books are to her because otherwise her reaction at the end would seem over-the-top and out-of-character (as OOC as it can be for a character that the reader met only a few paragraphs ago).

Yes, Flitwick couldn't let her attitude go unpunished, no matter how justified it was in Marianna's eyes. Poor girl.

Haha- that description is perfect. Unfortunately, I don't think many people would choose to read this story if I put that in the summary box... But I'm so pleased that you enjoyed the level of description. Marianna was actually quite fun to write, once I got into her mindset.

Thank you for reading and for leaving such a lovely review!


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