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Review:shadowycorner says:
Firstly, some typos I noticed:

the manor's heavy door closely softly in their wake - closed?

There were multiple steps and detailed - details?

And yay, now about the chapter!

Once again you are doing a lovely job of painting out Pansy's character in an interesting way. The beginning of the chapter was very good, as it described events after the battle effectively and I really liked the part where Pansy walked around the portraits of her ancestors. It had this eerie feel of the pureblooded forefathers lingering there with her.

The house arrest must be tough, having people walk around your home and judging you while you have no real escape. I don't know if I could take that, you really managed to translate that feeling to me as a reader from the page. I can totally see how she doesn't know what to do with all the free time because nothing can keep her busy or interested long enough. She's so full of this restlessness. Not even the thought of writing letters to Draco is enough to appease, since it's all mingled with worry of him etc.

I liked how she thought back on the class with Amortentia. Granger's own smells had been uninteresting; freshly mown grass and new parchment were so plebeian. -> That was an awesome sentence that just about summed it all up.

Your writing, as I probably said before, keeps being very enjoyable. :) Another captivating chapter.

Liz

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out those typos! I'll be sure to fix them.

I'm glad that you're continuing to enjoy my depiction of Pansy's character.

I don't think that I could stand being under house arrest and having strangers walking through my house, judging me, either, so you're not along in that regard.

And since Pansy doesn't have a computer/internet access... She has nothing to do. :D

I'm glad that you liked that sentence. It's occassionally really fun to write from Pansy's perspective (not that it's boring- it's just that sometimes she has these really fun moments where her superiority comes to the fore in a funny way).

Thanks for your review! :D

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