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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! I haven't read too many stories centered around the Weasley children when they were young but I'm really glad that I read this one. This was such a cute story and I really enjoyed reading it.

First of all, your characterizations were amazingly well done. Percy curious and sweet and such a precious child and Molly was a fantastic mother, just like always. I really liked how you incorporated the desire to have something of your own because in a family of seven children it's not often that something is only yours.

The manner in which you managed to capture the essence of the Weasley family is quite eery because everything you managed seemed as though it had been taken straight from canon, making this a true "missing moment".

Molly's story was fantastic! I really liked how she made small mistakes in her telling because it made it more believable than if it was perfect. She was, after all, making it up on the fly. Her comment about getting Arthur to tell him the story of reproduction was very amusing. Good thought, Molly! The story was yet another example of how good a mother she is- it managed to both soothe Percy and give him something of his own to hold onto.

The only constructive criticism that I would give is that the last line of the story seemed a little out of place with the rest of the story- specifically, the part "alothough he does not know why". I don't understand why Percy wouldn't know why he leaves the door open; surely he would still have some faint memory of the story Molly told him and thus some inkling as to why he leaves the door open (which is a really cute idea, by the way).

All in all I think that you did an absolutely fabulous job with this story. It's such a cute story that fits seamlessly into the Weasley family history and it's definitely going into my favourites. Great work! :D

Author's Response: I'm so happy you liked this! I wrote this for a bedtime stories challenge a while back, and drew Percy as the child to whom the story was being told. I was really excited to be able to write about a young version of him, diluting his pomp with the innocence and playfulness of being young. I liked the chance to be able to write Molly in her element as a mother, balancing her sternness with her motherly affection.

I'm not sure exactly why I chose to say that Percy doesn't know why he keeps his wardrobe open; I think it was because Percy is, above all, an extremely serious person. He takes himself perhaps more seriously than anything else in the world. So the idea of keeping his wardrobe door open for an imaginary elf would probably not sit well with his high opinion of himself, so he's chosen to forget the particulars. But on a subconscious level, it's still there. :)

Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely review!

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