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Review:The Misfit says:
Hi there, it's apondinabluebox from the forums repaying you for your lovely review! :D

You have a good start to your story! I'm liking Tracey so far; it's unusual in a good way to see a Slytherin who doesn't actually fit in with the others, while supposedly still maintaining the pureblood beliefs of the House. I have to ask: is Tracey Muggle-born or half-blood? The reason I'm wondering is because Tracey's Hogwarts letter caused the constant arguments between her parents, at least that's what she believes. You don't mention what they're arguing about, so I assume Tracey's magical ability, although I might very well be wrong. In addition, she does mention concealing a secret from her fellow Slytherins, but again, she doesn't mention what. Ahh I want to know! :P

I would advise possibly reducing the amount of information you provide in the first few paragraphs, as there is a lot to absorb in one go, especially when it isn't broken up by dialogue or action or in the parts where it is, that dialogue / action is minimal. I would also recommend putting the name of the person's POV at the top of each POV change, as I very nearly missed the switch to Theodore's POV.

I loved your paragraph about the Slytherins protecting each other even though they don't show it, and that's a nice touch in my opinion. This sentence: "As a matter of fact, I would say that even some Gryffindor’s knew more information about my roommates than I did..." was priceless! :D

And I'm liking the plot so far. This Theodore/Tracey/Daphne love triangle is intriguing and I look forward to seeing how it develops. I would say that this chapter is a very promising start to the story! :D

Author's Response: yes the whole point of this story is that they each have something they want to protect or do and you will only find out as the story continues! So you must read on to find out if she is muggleborn halfblood or pureblood! I will take a look into the amount of information but the only problem is that I have 8 main characters and 2 povs for each chapter so i think there is only going to be a total of 8 chapters in each persons pov so i need to make sure that i've set up that person and their story well so i can continue on. I will be adding in the names before the sections of pov changes to help people. I had meant to add them in and then forgot to too so I will make sure to do that soon! probably on friday when i add the new chapter! I'm so glad that everyone is enjoying that bit about the slytherins! yes the Theo/Tracey/Daphne is rather interesting though if you continue to read you will find out it gets even worse! though I can say that Tracey is not Daphne's love interest. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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