Okay, so... wow. This is so good! Of course I've read bucketloads of Marauders fanfiction, mostly humour, and I've read the first few chapters of JChrissy's Before They Fall, but this was just great!
I lovelovelove your characterisation of Sirius. He's just... so how I imagine him to be, just I never think of him falling in love with anyone. You've captured that intensity about him, even before Azkaban, and the situation with his family and the ideas of his mother and his homelife - without even having to go into it in two much detail. Obviously, Bellatrix and (possibly) Andromeda wouldn't be at school with him, being older, but I'm guessing that's something taken from Before They Fall? If not, it's easy enough to adjust, I think, if you're dead-set on getting it completely canon compliant ;)
Gah, the way you talk about Azkaban is brilliant too! The whole idea of how the Dementors affect him as Padfoot and how they get confused, etc. is explained so well, and you get the despairing aspect of it perfectly - I could imagine it so clearly in my head when you talked about it. All the mentions of what it would be like to feel grass, to be free... they were so... saddening in a really solemn, sombre kinda way. So perfect for this, though!
I have to mention the way you wrote this because I've never seen anything else on this site done like this. Little sections, each one a different time and a different point in his life, each one highlighting different feelings and thoughts and incidents - it was so clear, so easy to read and such a nice change. It really, really worked with this. It was like you were taking snapshots of his life and putting them in a scrapbook or something. Really original.
Gah, I really enjoyed this! I wanna hug Sirius now for about two hours without letting him go. I may well be back... *shifty eyes* :)
Author's Response: Hi Aphoride! Let me start by apologizing for taking such a long time to respond to this lovely, lovely review. Ill health & university work make Athene a very dull girl.
Jamiâs Before They Fall is partly why I decided I should try my hand at a bit of Marauders, because itâs just such a juicy story full of interesting characters and dynamics, and I fancied a bit of that for myself. I chose to focus on Sirius, and of course that meant it got a little sad and dark, and less humourous.
I personally donât imagine Sirius ever fell in love either - he probably believed he had plenty of time to do that sort of thing later *sob* - but I wanted to give a little nod to Jamiâs story.
Thanks for pointing that out about Bellatrix and Andromeda! I think Andromeda would still have been there, but Bellatrix wouldnât. Honestly, thatâs just a mistake on my part (I heart canon), but I like the tension between the cousins and three sisters, so I decided to keep it.
I really appreciate your comments about the format of the story. It came about sort of by accident, but then I started to really like it and the way itâs quite theatrical. I particularly love your way of putting it - a scrapbook.
Iâm glad you enjoyed this so much! Itâs the most fun Iâve had writing anything on HPFF, ever I have to write Sirius again I think, he and I seem to have made a connection when I was writing and I felt like he was talking to me. Do I sound crazy enough yet?!
Thanks again for the lovely review!