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Review:justonemorefic says:
Ah so this is Tracey! I liked hearing about the divorce on her mind, and I wished I was reminded about it a little more through the chapter, since you began with it! I felt like I was being told a lot of things from Tracey, and I wasn't sure what parts were important, so emphasizing what's important (and also cutting out the parts that aren't so important) will help! I don't need to hear everything in the first chapter, and not so directly either (at least not her entire school history yet). Especially for a first chapter, as it's very important to keep reader interest, and it's easier if there's more action instead of paragraphs of backstory. You can easily spread a lot of this information apart for future use.

There were some paragraphs where the topic changed a few times, and it got a little confusing. Not that I didn't know what was going on, but I was thrown off, and I would be sure what the paragraph as a whole was about.

Seeing the flip side was interesting! Multiple PoVs can be quite fun, and there's a lot of potential for suspense and secrecy. ^__^

Author's Response: so part of the reason that so much has to be said in this first chapter is that I have 8 main characters and two povs will be shown for each chapter so I think that really means that only about 8 chapters will actually have her pov in them and I have a lot planned for this story as its going to be a bit like gossip girl and just be a bunch of drama. Never the less though, I will take a look and see if there are things that I could cut out. Yeah I'm a bit bad at that I think and I'm looking into getting a beta just waiting to hear back from someone otherwise I'll have to make a post for someone to take this up! I'm glad that you liked the multiple povs though! thank you so much for the read and review! I'm glad you liked it!

~Slytherinchica08~


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