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Review:justonemorefic says:
I am highly amused that there would be 100 failsafe ways to charm your hair, because how many ways do you need, really? But of course, it would be just as easy to fail in spellwork as it is with our lowly Muggle dye and blonde somehow turns flamingo-worthy pink 8D

Hee, I like Dom. Smuggling possibly illegal creatures to her boyfriend, I love it. It's exactly the sort of silly antics I'd expect a witch to get up to. Tam's cute trying to defend it too, from overly polite Louis. I think the scene in the train was a little roundabout, as I was wee confused at all the people getting introduced and I sometimes forgot who was in the scene or just being described, but the scene at the end was nice! I like how she's slowly noticed Louis has grown up a bit; it's natural and shows in their interaction.

Ah, and here's a few typos I found:
an understatement of the year -> the understatement
in my wild dreams -> wildest
in towel -> in a towel

I'd also suggest toning down the descriptions of physical appearances a bit, and in its place, take some time to describe more aspects of Tam's life, as I do feel like I learned a lot more about the Weasleys than her, and it is her story, after all. It's a cute beginning! :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for your review! =)

I would imagine that the book with failsafe hair charming spells would look pretty similar than weird catalogues that hairdressers tend to give for customers who can't decided whether to get a pixie cut, bob or whatever have you, just with spell instructions.

I'm glad you like my characters, and yes I noticed that I have to concentrate more to Tam in next chapters. There will be lots more of that in chapter two. I will have to check that train scene and see if I can get it more clearer.

Thank you for pointing out typos. I will fix those immediately.

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