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Review:teh tarik says:
Hellloo there Liz! Returning a review for the Holiday Review Swap thing :D Thanks for your lovely review; I'll get down to replying soon! I was initially undecided on whether I should review the first chapter or whether I should carry on reading from where I left off with this fic :) In the end I was really curious about where your story was heading to, so I went right on to this chapter.

So...wow! The tension and the drama and the conflict and everything are really building up here. You've managed to do a lot of things with this chapter; the pacing is wonderful and very controlled, and even with all the emotional highs and lows, you also managed to reveal new information! So the Malfoys are coming into the picture now; this just gets more and more intriguing. The scene in the shop was done very well; the exchange between Arthur and Harry was convincing, and at the same time, I think Arthur reacted very realistically. You've managed to portray his anger as well as his grief at Fred's death and Ron's memory loss very nicely. And I especially love the sense of umm...'partnership' (for lack of a better word) between Harry and Arthur! It was an interesting combination, and I think it worked really well and certainly did give your story variation in character interactions and dynamics (I haven't read the earlier chapters so this might be a recurring thing, apologies!).

And that bit with Ron and Hermione was so lovely :) I was sort of grinning like an idiot! Their high and low moments with each other are handled so well. Such lovely contrasts :) And that final scene was just too painful - Ron telling Hermione to leave when she's in such a vulnerable moment. It's really sudden, but not unrealistic, given Ron's very strong sense of family and that inherent Weasley protectiveness toward family.

All in all - a great chapter! I love the drama of this chapter and all the unresolved tension...and the characterisation as usual was really strong. Great work - I hope to read more soon :D

-teh

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