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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
Hey it Whiskey from Holiday Review Swap!

I don't read much New Gen, so I am not sure I can comment on originality, but I would still like to point out a few things I liked:

First, the team conference in the beginning was a great way to introduce the characters smoothly. It didn't seem forced at all and also put the characters in a situation where they had to accept praise, something people,as a rule, react to very differently. So that scene provided an additional opportunity to compare their individual reactions,thus informing the reader not only of who they are but what they are like. All in a few short paragraphs :)

New Generation is interesting because of all the ways we can imagine the wizarding world to be different from the Hogwarts era. But there is also the much used saying that the more things change, the more they stay the same. Although I suspect others might dislike the way Gryffindor-Slytherin rivalry seems to live on in this story, I feel that you presented it in a way that makes sense. The amount of children that Harry and co had (at more or less the same time, too) would create, I imagine, a kind of elite at the school. Elitism is the best breading ground I can think of for self-entitlement and arrogance and, as a result, resentment.

But, if you don't mind, I would like to offer some critique as well. Although I am generally not a fan of the hate-at-first-sight shipping device, I am a girl like any other and don't mind reading it once in a while XD And I think it would work very well in this story if the dialogue between Rose and Scorp was a bit more natural. Everything was fine, actually, until Albus left and Scopr asked this: "Do you really like Care of Magical Creatures?" I found it strange that he would *volunteer* to keep up the conversation, especially with a sentence that not only seems to care about the conversation partner's opinion but also imples the two sharing a moment of honesty. If all Scorp does is try to make Rose's life difficult, he would have done anything but that. Maybe he would have remained quiet and grinned at her, or he would have made fun of something she was wearing, or he would have tried to transparently manipulate her into doing his homework...etc.etc. But since he did something that seemed so unnatural,the rest of the conversation appeared to go rather awkwardly as well. I realize that you are finished with this story, but if you ever have the time to go back and edit it, then I would really advise you to have a careful look at that conversation. I suspect it is an important one for further events and it is supposed to tie that chapter together.

Apart from this one thing, I really had no other qualms and quite enjoyed the chapter! Happy holidays :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review - I'm glad you liked the chapter, and the way I've developed the world.

I understand what you mean in terms of Rose and Scorpius's conversation, and I'm actually glad that you picked up on it not really making sense if all he does is bother her and make her life difficult. That's certainly Rose's perception, but her perception is not necessarily accurate. :P

Thank you so much for such a lovely, detailed review, and I'm sorry it's taken so long for me to answer it!


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