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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! Let me just say, before I begin this review, that even with your shortened list on your thread I still had a hard time choosing one story to read. They all sounded so good!

But I've chosen this one and I'm really glad that I did. You've created such a mysterious and intense atmosphere in very few words. I could easily picture Hugo's walk home like something out of a horror movie and the beast's arrival was sudden enough to make me jump.

The second part of the chapter was very intriguing as well. Who is this mysterious stranger who drove away the beast? Is he a werewolf? And just how serious are Hugo's wounds? Will they cause him to experience characteristics of the beast, just like a werewolf's bite turns a person into a werewolf?

I was a little confused, though, as to when Albus obtained the wound on his arm. Did it happen when the beast pushed him? I know he hit his head then but I wasn't sure if the impact of the beast on him would be enough to open a wound on his arm...

I also noticed a small typo: "lisence" should be spelt "license".

Your description for this chapter was fantastic and the amount of detail you managed to fit in about Hugo's life was great! It's interesting that he has muggle friends- that's something that I haven't seen very often with wizards/witches. And, from the small mention of Hugo's parents, it seems like they're acting just like I pictured they would as parents: stern yet comfortable with their children.

All in all I think that you're off to a great start with this story. I'm very interested in what will happen next- will the mysterious stranger take Hugo away, to help and heal him himself? Great work! :D

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm glad you decided to pick this one. It's slow to finish, but actually one of my favorites to write.

A horror movie is definitely what I was imagining when I wrote this scene.

Ah, the mysterious stranger. He won't be mysterious for long, I promise. You will also find out about Hugo's bite soon.

Albus? I think you mean Hugo. He was knocked over because the wolf slammed into him as it got to his arm and bit him.

Well, since Hermione has Muggle grandparents and I assume they get to see their grandkids, it just made sense in my head that Hugo might have made Muggle friends while he was with them. Yes, that's how I see Ron and Hermione, too.

Thank you so much for leaving a review!


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