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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there! Here to return the review swap you left me on the forums! Thank you very much for that - it was a lovely review! :)

Anyway, I've never read a story like this which deals about children this young having to cope with the idea of death. I thought you dealt with the topic really well, and you really made Hannah, Neville and Frank react like real people would in that situation - with the whole 'what's dead?' thing and the inquisitive kid idea, with Frank always asking questions. Little things like that are so true to life, and they really rounded out your characters fabulously, so well done!

The only thing I want to mention is that you called is a 'funeral home'. It might be an Anglo-American difference (I'm English) but I've never ever heard of a funeral home, so I have no idea what you're talking about when you mention it O.o Maybe changing the terminology or describing what it does would be helpful to those readers, like me, who don't get it. If you want me to explain what we have in England, pm me and I'll do my best! :D Also, the whole kids-being-babysat-during-the-funeral-thing. Why would they bother taking them to funeral in the first place if only to have them babysat during it? It doesn't seem to make sense... a bit more explanation might be needed there, I think.

But, naw... the kids are so sweet! And Hannah is characterised wonderfully - the perfect stressed-and-upset-and-trying-to-be-strong-mother-and-wife. She and Neville (well, although we don't see her much in the books at all) seem so close to their canon counterparts and yet like they've grown up and matured. I loved your mention of Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny as well, with the Next Gen kids. It's just so right that they're all such good friends after the war - particularly Ginny and Hannah. They went through so much together while the Trio were out hunting Horcruxes...

Gah, this was lovely! Sad, but kinda hopeful in a strange way at the end, with the whole idea of a new beginning and perhaps a stronger partnership and little Frank maturing and understanding death... it felt like something really significant had happened, which was brilliant.

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hi! & no problem, you're story was really good(:

Thank you for all the compliments :) It was really interesting to write because I've never written for little kids before, but it was a good learning experience! Okay, I'll probably take you up on the offer to PM you about the funeral home. I've had another person mention that to me too, so maybe I can see how to change it around a bit or either explain it in an authors note or something? :)

Thank you so much for the review, it was really nice to hear your feedback!

-Amanda


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