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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! I'm here in response to your lovely review and I'm so glad that I chose this story to read. I think that you have a very interesting premise here. I find it curious that you didn't start the story at the moment of the incident that caused their memory loss- will you be exploring this later on in the story? If so, I look forward to understanding the origin of this problem.

I do think that this was a very interesting way to start the story. Immediately you've introduced us to not only one problem but two (at the very least); one, that Hermione and Ron have lost their memory and two, that they've started lives of their own and thus can't melt easily back into a relationship. The loss they both feel will probably make it easier for them to regain their emotional connection but I can't imagine that they'll abandon their new significant others easily, if from a sense of guilt if nothing else.

I really liked how you ended this chapter with the possibility of a reunion (I am correct in my guess that that was Ron being wheeled into the emergency room?) It certainly made me very intrigued and curious about the next chapter! I do imagine that if it is Ron that their lives will be colliding permanently now.

One thing I did notice, though, was that in the first paragraph of a section you tended to include a lot of details in a short space. Though the details were fantastic, I would try and spread them out- perhaps increase the amount of description even more- so that the paragraph doesn't sound crowded. However, it's a small thing in an otherwise great chapter!

I did like the opening scene, though it was disheartening to learn that Harry had given up hope. It was a great way to explain the situation without going into awkward and out-of-place detail in the scenes with Hermione and Ron. I wonder if Ginny will start another search for Hermione and Ron and if she'll find them and help them regain their memories... But I guess I'll have to read on to find that out!

All in all, I think that you did a great job with your first chapter. Everything flowed very smoothly and you have a very intriguing hook into the next chapter. Great work! :D

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