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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
Oh, no. :( I spent the whole chapter hoping that nothing was seriously wrong with her back before remembering the story summary. I can only assume that Alice's aches and pains are attributed to cancer. And if it's in her spine, which it sounds like it might be, that's not too good. I hope magic is able to heal it or something!

Her visit to the Healer reminded me of how my own doctor's appointments go; I'll sit there and talk to someone and tell them all of my symptoms only for them to leave the room and say that the doctor will be right in. To which I say exactly what Alice said and remark that I thought that was the doctor. (And then the doctor always repeats the exact same questions, ergh.)

Alice's relationship with Frank is so sweet, and her embarrassment when Bailey mentioned Albus being her 'boyfriend' to their mother, and Alice's subsequent running up the last few stairs purely because she didn't want to hear her mom's response, was a detail I really liked. It's showing me their various personalities rather than telling about them, and their interrelationships and all of that. I found that throughout the chapter, the details were wonderfully real - such as Alice knowing their mother was home because of her shoes sitting by the door, so she called out to her. The dialogue flowed well, too, and I found everything to be very believable.

Great read! I enjoyed it. :)

Author's Response: aw this was such a sweet review :) I'm really glad you're liking it so far and that you liked all of the details I put in!

Haha, I'm glad you caught on to and liked all of their personalities. Even though they are a big family of 7 and are a lot alike, each one has different things about them that makes them unique and I like being able to show that between big families because I have one of my own (:

Thanks again for your lovely review!

-Amanda


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