Before I forget! I have to say that I feel very smart at the moment. The moment he said Lily Potter, and Severus screamed not to lie to him, I 'wooped!' because I had been thinking it was Severus, and that just confirmed it. Whether he's delusional enough to think that the boy somehow knows about Lily and was trying to trick him, or he just doesn't know the name of the youngest Potter child, I'm not sure. But I'm excited to find out!
People getting children right is a huge thing for me. I know it shouldn't be, because a lot of people don't know a ton about kids. But I can't help it. When someone how a six year old talking liking a two year old, a seven year old trying to learn her ABC's, or a toddler sitting like a lump for hours it just drives me crazy. I was really happy with the perfect balance you found for Lorcan.
He started out very serious, the kind of importance a child feels when given a mission. He has one goal, he *will* achieve that goal, and he will get to live in the glory of it. Then the moment it isn't just watching and it isn't as much of a game, but a man is literally grabbing him and pulling him into this strange home, all that well thought calculation goes out the window. Hehe. out the window... while he's going in. okay. Sorry. Anyway, I loved that once he was scared, the fact that he was very much a child was incredibly obvious.
WHAT ARE YOU DOING ALIVE, SEVERUS SNAPE? Sorry, I just had to get that out. I was about to give you an.. 'I don't really believe that a woman would send a child to spy, a child who isn't allowed to be there,' type of thing until you threw me the 'Lily' curve ball. Ah! That makes much more sense. Not that it couldn't have been an adult, but she would have needed to be some sinister creepy lady and ya.
It's so weird reading something of yours that isn't Over The Edge, but I was absolutely enthralled with what was happening and who this boy was spying on. And YOU! I should have known you'd leave me with a cliffie, but as there's another chapter I suppose I can't be too upset.
I really enjoyed this first chapter, m'dear!
Author's Response: Gah, you're too good to me. I can't believe you made the time to pop over and take a look at this story too. And you *are* super smart. I totally added that line as a direct nod to that Snape/Harry moment in OotP.
I'm so glad you thought I got Lorcan's age right here. It was something I really fretted over. It's hard, striking that balance. It wouldn't work if he was too young. It needed to be believable that he might be out of his parents' sight for an afternoon. But he also needed to be young enough to see the adventure in it all and not start questioning what is really a very poorly thought out plan.
Haha, yes, Snape is the only creepy adult in this story. Well, no, I guess that's not true. Draco and Lucius make their appearances as well :P
Thank you so much for a lovely review (not that you are capable of leaving an un-lovely one!).