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Review:wytchkitty13 says:
Hello ^^ I'm here for the holiday review swap!

I like how you started out, giving us a nice picture of the five year old waking up her mom. I've got kids so I can totally relate. You put a lot of details into this first chapter. It was like a play by play. I personally found all the details well thought out and flowed nicely.
Audrey is so cute and just imagining her makes me almost giggle.

Tracey seems like a very well thought out, defined original character with her being a good mother and from reading the second part, a good worker as well. I find her to be one of those strong motherly, nurturing types.

Theodore Nott certainly seemed a little too nice as he was a Slytherin but then again since he's not that well known we really didn't get to honestly see much of him. He seemed really to the point when he was asking to have lunch with Tracey and even told her to invite her daughter.

Suspicious. Makes me wonder what he is up to...I'd say watch out Tracey, former class mate or not, I wouldn't be so trusting of him. It's hard to say much right now I'd have to read the next chapter or so lol.

This was a nice first chapter :)

Author's Response: Aw thanks so much! Its always nice to hear that I've done a good job portraying Tracey and Audrey's relationship as I dont have any kids so its nice to know that i've at least got a good idea and one thats not too far off from reality. Theodore is a bit different, he never really knew her in school, at least they never really talked much, but i picture him (at least in this story) with having a crush on her even back in school so when he sees her he just can't help but ask her out. I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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