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Review:peanuts11 says:
I love absolutely everything about this story. I love how you disassociate Remus and the Wolf like their two different characters. I love Remus' heightened sense of smell and he describes everything and what it smells like because of his powers as a wolf. I especially love the 4 way bromance between James, Sirius, Peter and Remus as they all have individual personalities that you have accurately ad brilliantly depicted. James as the leader, Peter as the unlikely sidekick, Sirius is willing to take one for the team and Remus who I feel I've said too much about.

Also, the last part of the 4th chapter just made inexplicably sad. Real tears shimmering here!

You really pay attention to the tiny details that many, me included, overlook but form a vital part of the story. For example, I feel like I already know Remus' intimate thoughts as his internal monologue is so frequent and cleverly embedded. Yet you also manage to include details about the weather, the mood, the time, setting, which is key and very well done. I think you truly have a talent .

Perhaps you could pay a little attention to sentence structure as sometimes you appear to use a longwinded way of saying something. Although, I should note that this is minor and doesn't detract from your great writing skills.
I also think that it's important to use italics to indicate the stresses on words in a sentence otherwise Remus' voice seems a bit passive. I think you should pay a tiny bit of attention to the use of commas.

But as I said, you are such a good writer that I could read absolutely anything you write

peanuts11

Author's Response: I'm super glad that you enjoyed the story. Originally it was supposed to be one chapter and then, where that one ended, it needed a second one and I thought that was it. My beta reader was the one that convinced me to continue a bit more. Even though JKR stated that being a werewolf is like having a disease, I figured I should still keep to the werewolf mythos and allow Remus to have a bit of 'werewolf' in him like the sense of smell and sight when he's human. I wanted to add strength but somehow it didn't go with Remus' personality.

The 4th chapter is my favorite of them all, to be honest. My main objective in that chapter was to make people cry. Haha, no joke. So I'm both glad and sorry that I made you tear up! XD

Details are a big deal in this story. Perhaps not in Remus' point of view where he's able to speak but they're important for Wolf. He can't communicate and his way of thinking is very animalistic so details are super important in order to make the story move forward without that many bumps.

I'll definitely look into the sentence structure once I'm done with this story. That way I can concentrate 100% on it. I honestly try to not use italics for any of Remus' part due to italics means that its Wolf talking and not Remus. That's how this story is set up. However, when I edit the story, I'll go ahead and fix a bit of Remus' dialogue/thoughts to not make him so passive.

Anyway, thanks for the review!! :D Glad that you enjoyed it enough to read all of the 4 chapters. If you're interested, chapter 5 will come soon.

--Rosie


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