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Review:slytherinchica08 says:
So I think that this chapter does a great job of setting up your story, it creates interest, wondering who the girl really is, and if the fact that she has purple eyes should be a tipoff about something. I could feel the bit of suspense in the beginning with him wandering around and following this path of blood and then the fear that ran through him as he tripped. My one suggestion to make this chapter even better than what it already is (which it is good), would be to add in more description. You do a good job with it as he wanders through the forest but than once we get to her we know nothing until the end of the chapter when you say that she has purple eyes. How did she appear to him when he first saw her? Adding in more description here and there would really help. Other than that though, I thought this was a great first chapter! Great Job!



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