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This is, beyond a shadow of a doubt, the cutest story I've ever read involving Percy. And I don't mean that to be a backhanded compliment, either. He is absolutely adorable in this, it's just that it's really hard to trump Ginny and Ron for cute, if you know what I'm saying.
You really sucked me in right from the start. The way you described him climbing onto the counter to get a cup from the cupboard instantly reminded me of the way my own kids used to get into everything before we finally gave up and put all of their cups and bowls down at their level.
Molly was really well written. Stern, but still very caring and understanding. You managed to slip in a lot of insight about Bill and Charlie into this as well, along with Fred, George, Ron and even just a bit about baby Ginny. Nobody was left out.
The way that Molly's story unfolds was super-cute and came out just right for a weary parent who's trying to engineer that perfect tale to assuage her child's fears and, most importantly, convince the little night owl to go to sleep! On more than one occasion, I've been guilty of accidentally mixing up the characters' names in the middle of a story, something that my kids are never hesitant to point out. Percy held up his end of things brilliantly, as well. The way that he stopped her to question every word and concept that he didn't understand sounded so perfect for a precocious little boy who refused to let anything important get past him! Molly pulled off some really nice recoveries, and some that... well, some that Arthur is going to regret when he's explaining how babies get inside tummies. Serves him right for not getting up to check on his son! ;)
Your writing was beautiful in this. I couldn't find a thing wrong with it and I loved how your descriptions and word choice fit so well with a story about a mother and her young son. Nothing too formal or eloquent or highbrow.
And your ending was absolutely inspired. Percy was off-the-charts cute, bringing a snack to his frightened little roommate. And the comment about leaving his wardrobe door open was awesome.
Very nice job!
Author's Response: It's extremely hard to trump Ron for cute. If you've ever read "Growing Up Weasley", you know exactly what I'm talking about. I wrote this for a bedtime stories challenge on the forums quite a while back, and drew Percy as the child to whom the story was being told. It was fun to make pompous, inquisitive little Percy more endearing than we're used to seeing him.
My little one is still young enough that I can tell a story about an elephant that changes midway through to Little Red Riding Hood, which then turns into the big bad wolf versus Voldemort, who end up having a picnic, and she doesn't even bat an eye. I'll have to step up my game in a year or two when she starts to pay attention to what I'm saying. XD
The thought of Arthur explaining the birds and the bees to Percy makes me laugh. I can only imagine how, in such a large family, the wrong sort of information gets passed down from older kids to younger kids, so that by the time George and Fred are instructing Ron on the facts of life, he thinks that all babies are hatched from eggs or something. lol.
Thank you so much for your amazing review!