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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Ahh!

I knew I had read this story before, but I couldn't place it because I've had so many requested reviews for Next-Gens on the ol' forums. But yours totally stands out in my mind amongst the others; I'm really excited to see that you've updated!

And I feel so stupid--I completely misread your last chapter. XD I thought that it was your female OC in St. Mungo's, but I really like the way it's going now that I realize who is actually who. I'd consider going back to check ways that you could clarify that it's James in the bed in the first place; I'll have to re-read it but I feel like possibly we aren't given specific mention of who it is? But like I said, it could totally just be me.

Interesting that James now has a scar, like his dad. :)

I liked Florence's bit, "You can just expect somebody to wave their wand..." because it actually applies in the HP universe XD Did I mention that I love that she's a Creevey? It's so perfect; she definitely shares Colin's and Dennis's upbeat attitude.

I want to know some physical descriptions, about James and Florence particularly. We do know that James has a shaved head, and can assume that he's athletic, but I need more, more, more! :D In fact, I'd like it if your chapters were longer in general; how does James spend his time? What exactly happened the last time in gait therapy? I feel like one of my old professors harping at you, but it really is so important: show, don't tell! :)

I do love your ending line though. Poor James. I like his pessimism.

I'll send you a PM shortly! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

I am definitely going to start writing longer chapters, and I have taken your advice and gotten myself a beta :)

Thank you so much for all your help! You have given me new inspiration :D And for that you deserve a hug! Consider yourself hugged :)

Thank you so much! :D

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