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Review:Mystique says:
Hi, I'm here from the BVB review battle.

I just have to say first off that this story is really good. Its well written and I couldn't find any grammatical or spelling errors, which made it even more enjoyable to read.

This is a really interesting plot you've chosen. The aftermath of someone's breakup isn't written about that often and I think that you've captured really well.

I like all the flashbacks in the story - I feel like they add a greater depth to the story, its only the second chapter, but I've already learned quite a bit about Al and Melinda's relationship - the only thing I would say is that maybe their dominating it a little too much.

But apart from that, I really liked this chapter and I'm definitely going on to read the next chapters. Oh and I love the titles you've chosen for your chapters especially "The Bird Without Her Cage" and "The Snake Without His Prize."

Charlie

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing!

I'm quite glad you liked my story, and I do hope that you enjoy what you read if you do decide to read on. :)

As for what you've said about Al and Melinda's relationship... I probably did say too much in the second chapter, but I was aiming for a 4-chapter fic, and it seemed like a logical way for the story to flow. If ever I have time to rearrange things, I will definitely try to make it a little more ambiguous about the nature of their dispute.

Thanks again for your review!! Feel free to leave another one if you have time. I love getting feedback from people because it makes me a better writer. :)

~UnluckyStar57


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