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Review:slytherinchica08 says:
So the only thing that I really found odd and out of place in this chapter was that his partner was a Slytherin but yet when they caught the two other Slytherins you described her as being scared of them being involved in Death Eater activity but I would imagine that a Slytherin wouldn't be scared at all. There was also one sentence that was off and its here, "Sitting in the front could be dangerous if the professor was had a tendency to spit while he talked or if he had a fear of vampires requiring him to use garlic as a perfume." I think that the word was is extra and if dropped would help keep the flow that the rest of the story does wonderfully. I enjoyed the characterization in this chapter a lot other than the small bit with the Slytherin girl I felt that they were all spot on including Dumbledore who I feel is very hard to do. Oh I've forgotten to mention in my other reviews that I do like the small clip from him teaching and then going back to him being a student at hogwarts which is all brought on by Luna being in his class. I think that this is a very original idea that you have and I look forward to reading more! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Not all Slytherins are Death Eaters, though, and that's what I wanted to show. Maybe the Death Eaters wouldn't target most Slytherins, but it'd still be scary. Yep, that's just an extra word in that sentence. Thanks for pointing it out!

Dumbledore is incredibly hard to write. I always worry that I don't do him justice, so I'm very glad you liked his characterization! I'm glad you like the flashbacks, too! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)


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