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Review:GirlOnTheSidelines says:
Well crap.

Hello there. That was one hell of a chapter. The tension between them is almost tangible and I love how she didn't allow herself to look at him (I wish I had her discipline). I absolutely love your characterisation of both Audrey and Percy... Even when I don't always understand them. I mean what is going through Percy's head?

I couldn't help but laugh when Audrey was trying to talk to Joseph Wring and Percy became completely overprotective. I did not really expect that from him, especially then. When he put his arm around her waist, I actually shivered slightly, in a good way, because I was as shocked as Audrey. And probably as pleased.

But that ending. Sometimes I think you make your readers suffer more than your characters. And that is saying something! I loved the way she was so mad at him but couldn't help herself when he kissed her. And is confession? That was probably the most unexpected thing in the whole chapter... and there were quite a few unexpected things. I mean really? I was just like 'eek!' Oh yeah, I actually squealed. This story is just amazing. I really don't know how you do it.

Anyway, well done once again and I cannot wait for more of this! Soon! I'm actually excited to see where this is going. So please update soon...

You're amazing,

GirlOnTheSidelines x

P.S. Loved the chapter title. Scrumptious is an awesome word that needs to be used more. I might try and wiggle it into one of my chapters. Not that they are particularly scrumptious at the moment.

Author's Response: Hello!

Well dang. Hahaha, I love you, you always make me laugh! Thanks for coming back to this chapter by the way, I wasn't quite as pleased with it as I would have liked to have been. For some reason, I thought it dragged a little but apparently not! D':
Ooh, the heat between Audrey and Percy is SO much fun to write. They're so strange for one another but they're just...perfect, like chocolate and peanut butter (I must be hungry.) and I even don't understand all of their emotions.
I mean, Percy, what's your issue man? Hahah.
I loved writing that scene with Percy, Audrey and Joseph. It was incredibly awkward wasn't it? And Percy changed so much from just a few seconds ago, didn't he? I mean, putting his arm around her waist was just a sign that things weren't as well as you might have thought. Or something like that. Percy, Percy, Percy...
So yummy.
HAHAHA! I just LOVE ending my chapters at a point where you all are like, "WHAT?!" hahahah. You should see what I've done to A Force of Wills lately...its hilarious.
But not for you guys though.
Hahah. >:D
It was really something to see Audrey struggling, she knew it wouldn't have been a good idea to kiss him but she gave him. Their connection is just too strong! She couldn't fight it!
Percy's confession is a bit of a shocker, isn't it? I mean, seriously, we don't know HOW he feels about Audrey up until this point. So it was a jaw dropper I think, especially when I wrote it.
Hahah, you squealed?! Yes. Keep on squealing, it just gets worse from here. Mwhahahhaha.
I hope you stick around, I have quite a few twists and turns for it and I hope it comes across all right. I try my hardest...
>_< You're far more amazing! Update your stories!
P.S.: Haha, I try to have each chapter title having to do with food. Since her names The Bad Taste, each chapter title has to do with a flavor, texture or whatnot and scrumptious just fit. And scrumptious is a pretty smexy word, right? It just makes me all fuzzy and such. Hahaha.
Update your stories, I miss your angst!
Much love,
Gabbie


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