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Review:True Author says:
Hi! Here from the Ravenclaw review battle! =]

First off, you have a definitely good plot. There aren't many break up stories here, so this one seemed original.

Melinda is an interesting character, but I thought she spoke to Al a bit too clearly. I mean, they're breaking up, aren't they? and they're breaking up after a long relationship so her speech should be something different. Like you can make her hesitate or something.

Otherwise a nice start! =]

Author's Response: Thanks very much for your review!!

You're actually the first person to mention Melinda's style of speaking, and there's kind of a funny story behind it.

You see, I based this story off of a real-life event, one that actually happened to me. When I spoke, I spoke frankly, because I was disgusted with the way things were. My feelings were not considered, and so I wanted to make things as quick as possible. That's kind of the viewpoint I was writing from, if you can believe that!

But I like your suggestion. I do understand that probably no one speaks like Melinda, except me, and so it might be a little hard to stomach.

Thanks for taking the time to review!


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